I was challenged to write a 14-line rhyming poem in iambic pentameter. What I learned: I hate structure! But here it is:
wholly incomplete, dusty and battered
ripped twice with weak hands, today thrown away
yet the only thing that really mattered
without it his life was in disarray
he once had given to it tender care
but now it lay completely neglected
an untidy heap on the rocking chair
not a hope or prayer of being resurrected
til he had faded for so many sad years
and remembered what he had lost and found
wisdom often comes with much grief and tears
hoping for life the other way around
but still the color of blue stains the wood
while soft breezes offer silent retreat
7 comments:
That's funny. The concept, not the poem.
great foto! structure.....hmmm...seems to determine content. you are great!
What I learned: I hate structure!
Were you surprised by that? I hope not...I wasn't.
A friend and I did an exercise together this week...this is my result...
Planting a Peach Tree
His dark hands were limber and fine
dark hair like the descriptive lines of a woodcut
shadowed the skin on the backs of his fingers
and the back of his hand.
He cupped a peach in his left hand
warmly colored and softly furred
its juice ran down his palm
as his right hand carefully wielded
the paring knife
Three moons were suspended on the horizon
unevenly trimmed ragged nail clippings
on the dirty carpet of night.
I asked him if he would spread lotion
on my back, moonshine always dries my skin.
He stood and I felt the stickiness of his fingers
as he unloosened the buttons on the back of my dress.
The wind riffles my hair
and I pat the dirt around the pit,
stand, touch the top of the stone
and walk away.
not surprised...just confirmed my suspicions! Beautiful poem!
things like that shouldn't be surprises especially when you get to be our age... ;)
ha! I keep discovering things about myself...things I guess I've been in denial about...some good, some bad...but still me! You're never too old to learn!
Hi, nice blog and interesting pics;
good combination photo-words
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